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This week I’m continuing where I left off with To Catch a Threeve. Axel nearly fell asleep and realized whoever’s been stalking him had cast a spell over him and his deputy, Drummond.
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Axel carefully flexed his muscles to make sure he had control of them, closed his eyes to slits and waited.
He’d positioned the bag that held the gem between where he lay and Drummond sat. A bold thief indeed would be required to enter their little circle, but the sleeping spell would give him misguided confidence. Damn good thing Axel had protected himself against such mischief. There was always the chance that the sneak might try to plunge a knife in his back.
His muscles ached with the tension of remaining perfectly still while near silent footsteps crept out of the trees behind him. The sneak paused for a long time, no doubt watching Axel with a careful eye to see if he twitched or if his soft breathing broke its rhythm. It took all of Axel’s self control not to leap up and give chase, but he’d be sure to lose his quarry if he acted prematurely.
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Unofficial Blurb for To Catch a Threeve
To Catch a Threeve is an m/m erotic fantasy that takes place in the medieval land of Lacknor. Constable Axel Blackwood catches a thief and is astounded to see that he closely resembles the love he lost seven years ago in an attack by the evil woodland folk known as threeves. He quickly realizes he’s fallen prey to dark magic, but can’t help becoming infatuated with his prisoner and is overwhelmed with the hope that he can at last bring his lost lover home. Bryn Darrow, the half-threeve, half human orphan sent to trick Axel and rob him of much more than a simple gem finds himself equally as fascinated with his handsome human captor and the lure of some place to call home, but believes that the constable is in love with a dangerous illusion.
Alexis Duran 
Wow, you’ve done a fantastic job capturing his tension. Lovely bit of writing.
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That scene really drew me in! I could feel the ache in his muscles as he waited, trying not to move. Nicely done! Great 8.
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Breathless, I’m reading your snippet. You’ve done an amazing job of writing suspense and keeping it growing.
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My favorite part about this is his competence…that he was prepared for this kind of threat and is ready to deal with it. Love that!
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Ah, the tension is tangible! Love it. And I love this character more and more with every snippet. Great job 🙂
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I think he’s about to catch a thief. Fantastic scene 😀
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Tense scene, I was riveted. I do like the way the hero is so competent and two steps ahead of everyone else. Can’t wait to find out who the sneak is. Terrific 8!
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Ooooohhh, the tension! Wow–you did a great job of building it through this excerpt, Alexis! And you’ve done such a marvelous job of describing their surroundings in earlier snippets that I could so easily picture it all~ Nice!
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Like it. Danger, tension, all the good stuff.
I wondered if you could do some inner monologue about his discomfort and eagerness to pounce (eg. Come on damn it, make a move; my neck is killing me lying here like this), or some more tactile sensations, smells, something to really put us in the character’s head-space.
Good eight
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I can’t wait to meet this little sneak : )
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Love his thought process!
Well, I couldn’t fake sleep that well. Hope he lures in the sneak and catches him off guard, this thief seems a bit dangerous.
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Your snippets get better and better each week!! your writing style is sheer brilliance!
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Thank you!
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Like that his muscles are protesting trying to ape the limpness of sleep.
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Fantastic set – I could visualize it.
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Interesting that it was a sleep spell and he had already prepared himself for it. Axel is my kind of guy 🙂 I liked the tension, never knowing if the person behind him will attack or not. Great job!
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
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