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I’m excited to get back to my space opera in progress, From Mars, With Love. This one keeps demanding my attention, so I guess I better finish it so I can get back to the “serious” stuff. 😉
Our hero Eli has been nabbed by a slave sweeper and taken aboard a ship bound for Titan. After watching some of his fellow prisoners strip, get inoculated and put into sleep pods, it’s now Eli’s turn.
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To Eli the asteroider said, “Remove your clothing.”
Eli was grateful that as a scavenger he always wore several layers of clothing, but as he removed his coat, his sweatshirt and a zip-up cotton shirt with deliberate clumsiness, his fear of the crab effectively discouraged acting on any rash escape plans. He was down to thin t-shirt, surplus army pants, and was undoing the velcro on his boots when the crab snapped, “What’s that?”
One of the crab’s pinchers reached out and grabbed Eli’s wrist. The bot’s red eyeball flew outward on its own extending arm to inspect the ring on his pinky finger as Eli curled his fingers into a fist.
“Just a cheap trinket,” Eli said. The ring was his only adornment, the only thing of his mother’s he’d been able to keep and it was so small, it barely fit on his smallest finger. The bot clamped on to it and tried to pull it off, jerking Eli sideways, but it didn’t come off.
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Really this whole space opera thing is an excuse for me to surf the web looking for photos of hot space guys with guns. Here we have Bruce in The Fifth Element- one of my top ten SF movies for sure.
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Alexis Duran 
I like this. You instantly pulled me into the story. Great use of details.
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Applause for this terrific snippet. You set the scene so well and tugged my heart right at the end.
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Great snippet, want to read more to find out about the ring,
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Yikes! I’m scared of the crab too. Great description:)
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I’m glad it didn’t come off, scary and exciting snippet!
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Uh oh, I hope the robot doesn’t tug too hard on that ring! Enjoying the story, thanks for the new snippet!
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A crab must be a scary thing when it’s as big or bigger than you are. I hope Eli doesn’t lose his finger over the ring.
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That eye… eww. Effectively creepy description, there! Hopefully the robot doesn’t remove his finger along with that ring.
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“It’s just a trinket.” Riiiiiight. 😉 Great 8 sentences! I look forward to reading more.
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That’s one frightening encounter. I hope they don’t take the ring away from him.
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Noooo! Alexis, you’re such a tease! Will Eli be able to keep the ring? I’m on the edge of my seat here;). Hurry up and finish!;)
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Awe, he can’t take the ring! I thought maybe he was going to cold-cock the crab, but since there’s no escape route. Dang! How scared he must be! Great 8, Alexis. Pulled me in.
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Oh no! Poor Eli! Hope he comes up with a way to get the ring back.
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I’m thinking there’s more to Eli, his mother, and that ring than we currently know. I want more!
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I hope he doesn’t take his ring. Its all he’s got. this could shake him up in his escape plan
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