Hello and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. I’m sorry I missed last week. I had computer issues, and now I return to find WordPress has once again “improved” its interface. Why is it improvements always seem more like irritations than anything actually helpful? Could it be my old brain doesn’t like change? Nah…
So on the snippet. I’m back to sharing from my fairy tale revisited, a reimagining of the Snow White story with a male character in the title role. Last week, Prince Gabriel returned to his family’s castle for the first time in three years, during the autumn Festival of the Hunter’s Moon.
The moment Gabriel slid from Tempest’s back in the castle courtyard, his servant pounced.
“Sire! You are due in the great hall in mere moments! Your boots are full of mud and your clothing is inappropriate!” In his panic, Webster impetuously reached out and plucked a twig of holly from Gabriel’s hair.
“I see you’ve recovered from your bee sting,” Gabriel said as he handed Tempest’s reins to a stable boy. Other servants swarmed around them to gather Gabriel’s packs from the horse. “Old Aldous hasn’t lost his touch.”
“Oh, yes, nothing a healing poultice and a brandy couldn’t cure. Although the healer you knew is no longer here. Retired. Gone to live in a cave or whatever it is old alchemists do.”
That’s the traditional Ten. Here’s a bit more for your reading pleasure:
Webster cleared his throat and stared at the cobblestones. “I’m sorry to have abandoned you at such an inconvenient time.”
“Nonsense, Webster. You would have hated tramping through the muck after game anyway.” Gabriel brushed the remaining petals from his sleeve, disappointed to learn another trusted member of his mother’s court was gone, but determined not to dwell on it. “I thought I’d remain dressed as I am. Gives me more the appearance of a man of action, does it not?” He ran his fingers through his hair and found another twig, this one still attached to a leaf.
Webster gaped at him in abject horror. The servant himself had donned his finest blue tunic with silver trim and tied his long brown hair back in a tidy bun. He looked more like a worried old woman than ever. Gabriel smiled and Webster let out a breath of relief.
“Oh, sire, you had me—ha, ha—naturally, you wouldn’t—you were joking, weren’t you?”
“I was, but I’m only submitting myself to your tortures because I have to make a speech.”
Blurb for Snow (working title):
Following the death of his mother the Queen, Prince Gabriel returns home for the first time in three years. Gabriel hopes for a reconciliation with his estranged brother, the new king, but all is not well at Castle Rosenthal. King Tristan has fallen under the sway of a mysterious noble woman with a dark past, and all along the border of the Black Forest, magical denizens are on the move. Gabriel begins to fear for his life. Is the handsome huntsman in on a plot to assassinate him, or is there an even darker, more evil power afoot? A forced flight into the Black Forest may expose ancient magic at work, if Gabriel can survive long enough to uncover it.
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This exchange makes me like him.
Prince Gabriel is definitely charming. Fun snippet.
Oh no not a speech. Though, I’m sure he’ll do it rather well. And I do like this interaction. I’m really liking Gabriel.
I love Gabriel! He’s such a tease, but truly a kind person. So unlike his brother!
Glad to see Webster again! Seems ominous to me how the previous people are disappearing, retiring and what not…really enjoying the story. Another great snippet!
Don’t you hate it when the “company” makes changes to what you’ve already learned??? Microsoft does this all the time and drives me crazy.
I enjoyed the little banter between Gabriel & Webster. Shows their closeness.
I like Gabriel. I keep seeing Disney’s Prince Charming when I think of him. Tall, broad shoulders, ready smile.
Great. Now the song ‘when you wish upon a star’ is running through my brain…
Gabriel seems like he’d make a much better king, at least as far as how he seems to genuinely care for his servants.
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I can hardly wait to read what he’ll share in that speech. 🙂