Weekend Writing Warriors ~ Bad Form

Greetings and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop where writers from a wide variety of genres share from their work in excerpts of ten sentences. I’m sorry I missed last week, and even sorrier it wasn’t for a fun reason, like a writers’ retreat, but because of the multiple day jobs encroaching on my weekend. I’m always scheming to work less, but somehow, I keep adding jobs instead of shedding them.

Enough whining! On to the snippet. I’m sharing from my work-in-progress, a romantic gay fantasy inspired by the classic tale of Snow White. Last week, as Prince Gabriel is made presentable for the big feast, he decides he’d like to wear his mother’s brooch, but alas, it is not to be found.


“I did not see such an item.” Webster whirled around. “You there! Finley? Farley? Search the cabinet for the prince’s silver brooch! If it’s gone missing, someone will answer for it!”

The tray of baubles disappeared and a ruckus ensued as every drawer, trunk and cabinet in the room was opened and searched.  By the slant of moonlight hitting his floor, Gabriel knew he was pushing his luck. He couldn’t afford to arrive at the great hall after Tristan. It was bad form.  

That’s the official Ten. Here’s a bit more:

He forced down his sudden nervousness.  He needed the weight of his mother’s history to bolster him. The silver stag had been crafted over two hundred years earlier. Although crude by current artistic standards, it would help remind Tristan that Gabriel had not just pulled a fairy tale out of thin air and that he’d been right not to kill the stag.


But will Tristan appreciate the reminder? I’m thinking not, but then what do I know? I’m just the transcriber of events here 😉


Blurb in progress for Snow:

Following the death of his mother the Queen, Prince Gabriel returns home for the first time in three years. Gabriel hopes for a reconciliation with his estranged brother, the new king, but all is not well at Castle Rosenthal. King Tristan has fallen under the sway of a mysterious noble woman with a dark past, and all along the border of the Black Forest, magical denizens are on the move. Gabriel begins to fear for his life. Is the handsome huntsman in on a plot to assassinate him, or is there an even darker, more evil power afoot? A forced flight into the Black Forest may expose ancient magic at work, if Gabriel can survive long enough to uncover it.


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10 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors ~ Bad Form

  1. It’s interesting that Gabriel is more worried about bad form in front of their guests rather than what his brother, the King thinks. I love Gabriel more and more with every snippet!


  2. Nicely set up dilemma for him. Is brother stealing/selling his mother’s things? Or giving them to someone else? Oh, I love questions.


  3. Pingback: Weekend Writing Warriors ~ Acceptable | Alexis Duran

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