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Here’s another snippet from my m/m space opera work-in-progress, From Mars, With Love. Our hero Eli has just been rescued by the mysterious man in black, who may or may not be a marine, friendly, or even very nice.
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“Ask them to bring a robe or something, why don’t you?” Eli asked, putting the pod between them. The man didn’t react, but continued to watch him with a wary sort of bemusement. He was irritatingly attractive in that rich habitat dweller sort of way, and didn’t look like a typical jarhead at all. Eli was only used to seeing beautiful people in holos, or the enhanced variety in the clubs who always looked a little strange, no matter how expensive the procedure.
He changed his mind about the man in black. Probably not enhanced, except the eyes, which were most likely implants. Eli realized they were staring at each other without speaking, and imagined the man had opposite thoughts about Eli, like how he wasn’t used to seeing earth rats in the buff. He didn’t look disgusted, but Eli took offense anyway.
His rescuer finally broke his mesmerizing gaze and started to poke around the room. He kicked at the corpse of the security crab and said, “Looks like we got here in the nick of time, eh?”
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Luke Macfarlane from Killjoys. I’ll take an unenhanced jarhead any day.
From Mars, With Love follows the adventures of Eli and his pal Rilke, two down-and-out scavengers from earth as they’re abducted by slavers, arrested by space marines, and dumped on an unwelcoming outpost on Mars. Eli’s troubles are only beginning when he finds out the ring his mother gave him contains the life force of a powerful but dormant alien and the mysterious man he has a huge crush on happens to be an alien artifact smuggler. Eli’s just trying to make it on Mars, but can he survive the dangerous political intrigue swirling around him? This erotic space opera is a work-in-progress. Stay tuned to this blog for ongoing excerpts and updates.
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Alexis Duran 
Loved the internal monologue. Makes me want to read more.
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Love how you seamlessly worked in some interesting info about Eli’s world while he and hot jarhead ogle each other. Hope that robe takes its time arriving. 🙂
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Always enjoy the snippets from this story! (Loved the picture of D’avin too, nice visual.) Great!
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Internal thoughts are just fine and well written. The last line had a touch of humor.
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the subtle dance begins 🙂 now I must look up killjoy in case I’m missing hotness in action. LOL
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Irritatingly attractive’ – has to be the best description I have read all week. Excellent build up of tension Alexis.
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A wonderful snipped, as always Alexis! I particularly liked the bit where Eli determined to take offense despite a possibly admiring stare. That is a great set up for some future conflict.
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God descriptions. I like “rich habitat dweller” Is that what we are?
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Pretty much! In my future earth, things have shifted so that only losers live on the ground.
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This is a great snippet. I love your writing. The mechanics, the flow of it. Everything.
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Gee, Thanks!
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Why do I get the feeling that his stare wasn’t with such opposite thoughts as Eli imagines? Love the humor and intrigue here–and nice buildup of tension between them. Great snippet!
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For some reason, I’m picturing Will Smith as the rescuer. Why do you suppose that might be? 😉
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I love the descriptor “irritatingly attractive.” I’ve definitely met some people who fit that description. Nicely done!
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If you’ve got all the money and tech you need, I bet everyone ends up ‘beautiful.’ That last line makes me hopeful, it sounds almost friendly!
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Just in the nick of time! Wonderful description, Alexis. 🙂 !
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