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I’m sharing from my work in progress, currently titled Snow. This is a romantic fantasy inspired by the tale of Snow White. Snow White has been around for centuries, long before Disney, and one of the fun things about reimagining a tale so embedded in the culture is picking and choosing the elements that appeal to me, adding my own, and presenting a story that is both familiar and unexpected. My first exposure to Snow White came from a big old book of European fairly tales from my Czech grandmother. Then, of course, at the age of seven, I was deeply impacted by the Walt Disney version (re-released on the big screen!) This little scene within the larger, darker tale of the hunt, was surely inspired by that animated version, but as I wrote, I found that the idea of having Prince Gabriel connected to the forest creatures played in perfectly with how things develop later, and might just help save his life. You can read last week’s snippet here.
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A chickadee lit on a branch just ahead of him, cocked its head and let out a shrill series of chirps, tweets and whistles.
“Please go away,” Gabriel said, “We’re trying to be stealthy.”
Falkner waited for him, and Gabriel could have sworn the stern huntsman was trying to suppress a smirk. Gabriel’s cheeks started to burn. It wasn’t his fault forest creatures found him…curious. But he didn’t have to talk to them, a point frequently made by his brother.
When he reached Falkner, the birds vanished in puff of feathery motion.
“If you could refrain from soliloquizing, it would be helpful, your lordship,” Falkner said with a perfectly straight face. A perfectly perfect face, actually, except for a faint, dashing scar along his prominent left cheekbone.
Rather than admit he’d been talking to a bird, Gabriel ignored the comment.
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Blurb-in-progress for Snow, a reimagined fairy tale:
Following the death of his mother the Queen, Prince Gabriel is called home by his brother, now King. Gabriel hopes for a reconciliation with his estranged brother, but all is not well at Castle Rosenthal. King Tristan has fallen under the sway of a scheming alchemist and along the border of the Black Forest, magical denizens are on the move. Gabriel begins to fear for his life. Is the handsome huntsman in on a plot to assassinate him, or is there an even darker, more evil power afoot? A forced flight into the Black Forest may expose ancient magic at work, if Gabriel can survive long enough to uncover it.
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Their little signs of their attraction to each other is adorable! Loving this story!
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Great example of conversation that isn’t ‘to the point’ yet nonetheless conveys a lot.
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Hmmm, a perfectly perfect face??? Finally! 🙂
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Ahhh! The thaw is finally setting in. Bring on the heat.
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Yeah, I deliberately resisted the immediate attraction gambit because Gabriel’s memories of Falkner are mostly negative. But now that they’re alone and close up, long buried feelings just might emerge 😉
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You hit it, my friend. Another fine snippet, my friend.
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What lovely memories you have of Snow White. I’m sure it will show in the book. This snippet came as a surprise. I didn’t expect an attraction between those two.
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This is great! Both the talking to the birds and the little signs of attraction.
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Love the scene. Well the chickadees did their best to warn him! Terrific excerpt and I’m still on the edge of my seat for whatever is coming next…
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