Hello and welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop where writers from a wide variety of genres share from their work in excerpts of ten sentences or less. I’m sharing from my current work in progress, a reimagined fairy tale with the working title of Snow. Yup, you guessed it. It’s inspired by the story of Snow White.
In this scene, Prince Gabriel is in the woods with the head huntsman, Gavin Falkner. They’re tracking a stag, which Gabriel hopes they don’t find. You can read the last snippet here.
“Are we getting any closer, do you think, or has the stag sensibly fled into the Black Forest by now?” Gabriel asked.
“Not likely, the animals don’t like the forest anymore than we do. It doesn’t appear to be running. We may catch up to it yet if we move quickly and stay silent.”
“Well, let’s stay close together so the birds don’t…cluster.”
Falkner gave him a quizzical look as if trying to decide what sort of man attracted birds, then moved on. This time he paid more attention to Gabriel’s progress and paused occasionally, letting go of low pine branches just in time so they swung into Gabriel’s face. Gabriel didn’t think this was on purpose. The man was simply intent on his job of tracking and he was an irritant, no more.
But as they continued on in this fashion, memories of the time when he was the object of his brother’s scorn—and therefore Falkner’s as well—arose against his will, and all the feelings of self-doubt, inadequacy and isolation came creeping out of the dark places in his heart where he’d banished them.
Blurb-in-progress for Snow, a reimagined fairy tale:
Following the death of his mother the Queen, Prince Gabriel is called home by his brother, now King. Gabriel hopes for a reconciliation with his estranged brother, but all is not well at Castle Rosenthal. King Tristan has fallen under the sway of a scheming alchemist and along the border of the Black Forest, magical denizens are on the move. Gabriel begins to fear for his life. Is the handsome huntsman in on a plot to assassinate him, or is there an even darker, more evil power afoot? A forced flight into the Black Forest may expose ancient magic at work, if Gabriel can survive long enough to uncover it.
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Poor Gabriel! Maybe he should put himself in the lead. Or keep talking to Faulkner so the stag will be long gone. Enjoying these snippets!
He and the animals both get spooked by the woods.
Oh, that’s the worst, when bad memories fuel of self-doubt–and worse, self-loathing. You do a great job of bringing that out in this snippet!
Oh, Gabriel, I so feel for you. Wonderful snippet.
You knock me off my pins, my friend. Another beautiful snippet.
Uh oh, the forest is getting to him! and I think he should be a lot more suspicious of his companion’s behavior…so I’m on the edge of my seat! Great snippet!
Which is worse–the forest or his companion? He needs to get out of there.
The forest is spooking him as well as the animals, but it seems a bit strange his companion seems at ease. I’m curious to know more.
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